Again I apologize for posting criticism instead of compliments, because there’s more good here than bad. But there’s a handful of lines that come off sounding happy-go-lucky, or carefree, when that’s not the right tone for them. It happens most often in dialogue, especially Tattletale’s and Bitch’s lines. The characters and conversations call for a more dire, or grave intonation, I feel.
Again I apologize for posting criticism instead of compliments, because there’s more good here than bad. But there’s a handful of lines that come off sounding happy-go-lucky, or carefree, when that’s not the right tone for them. It happens most often in dialogue, especially Tattletale’s and Bitch’s lines. The characters and conversations call for a more dire, or grave intonation, I feel.
The only one I really noticed was Lisa’s “later”.