Buzz 7.4

Narrator: NSPB

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2 Responses to Buzz 7.4

  1. warren peace says:

    Again I apologize for posting criticism instead of compliments, because there’s more good here than bad. But there’s a handful of lines that come off sounding happy-go-lucky, or carefree, when that’s not the right tone for them. It happens most often in dialogue, especially Tattletale’s and Bitch’s lines. The characters and conversations call for a more dire, or grave intonation, I feel.

  2. sol says:

    The only one I really noticed was Lisa’s “later”.

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